如果有语法错误的话帮我纠正一下好吗?today the point of my speech is my dream.as we all know,the dream is indisponsable to life.but,what do you think of dream?i think dream is worth the effort to win things.everyone has their own dream

如果有语法错误的话帮我纠正一下好吗?today the point of my speech is my dream.as we all know,the dream is indisponsable to life.but,what do you think of dream?i think dream is worth the effort to win things.everyone has their own dream
如果有语法错误的话帮我纠正一下好吗?
today the point of my speech is my dream.as we all know,the dream is indisponsable to life.but,what do you think of dream?i think dream is worth the effort to win things.everyone has their own dream.maybe someone want to be a doctor,someone want to be a teacher or a business.similarty,i also have a dream:to be a cartoonist.maybe you will ask me:why?what I want to say is there is a world in comic.every one will have their own small world.and I hope to share my passion and my world to others.drawing anime is a very happy thing for me.i don't want to be excited about dreams with you standing here.because I know the road of dream can't let us sing songs.on the country,there's no such thing as a free lunch.if you want to achieve the goal must be to learn to give.nothing can be done easily.so I am going to continue trying and I believe I can realize my dream.this is what I want I want to share with you.thank you for your listening.

如果有语法错误的话帮我纠正一下好吗?today the point of my speech is my dream.as we all know,the dream is indisponsable to life.but,what do you think of dream?i think dream is worth the effort to win things.everyone has their own dream
第一句话,如果是你题目,用Topic.Today the topic of-- 第二句用plural 和past tense.I think dreams are worth-- 后面用achieve比较好.I think dreams are worth the effort to achieve.Maybe someone want to be a doctor 不能用someone.你是在和大家说话,所以可以改成maybe some of you want to -- 第二个加个or,因为你已经在指大家了,就可以在详细点,Maybe some of you want to be a doctor,or some might want to be a teacher.
把后面的similarity去掉.因为大家已经知道你在说你的梦想,而且你没有在和谁相比,所以是多余的.
你可以在I also have a dream 这强调下.
I also have a dream:to be a cartoonist 你可以选择用逗号,或者直接写I also have a dream,which is to be a cartoonist--
i don't want to be excited about dreams with you standing here改成I dont want to be excited about dreams while standing here--- 语法问题.
后面的on the country 改成 in this country,如果你的意思是 "在这个国家里"
我没懂你这句 I know the road of dream cant let us sing songs
后面改成If you want to achieve the goal,you must learn to give 比较顺.
如果我改的话,If you want to acomplish your goal,you must act and plan.
面的I believe I can realize my dream.要改!←不成句+没懂你意思
最后面的so I am going to 改成 thus,i will--- 因为是你以后会怎么怎么样.
其次,这文章还不错.